Talk:Jennifer James
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who's = who is. "...whose name", not "who's name".
"Jennifer known as Jenny's father" - It would be very strange if Jennifer was known as Jenny's father, which is what this phrase indicates.
In a number of places, commas have been used where full stops are needed. In one place the wording and punctuation suggests that she got married after she found out she had been written out of the script. This is suggested by the reference to the marriage being followed by a comma followed by the word "after". The dates, however, suggest that in fact the wedding was first, then the news of the writing out. Presumably what happened after the news was not the wedding, but the production of the video. If this is incorrect, it will need to be changed back. Get someone good at grammar to help you with this.
Every birth is a drama. Details of the rush to the hospital aren't necessary in an encyclopaedia article. Difficult births are worth noting, though.—Copey 2 13:35, 25 April 2006 (UTC)
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Who is she, and what does she do? By reading the opening paragraph of this article, I should be able to ascertain this information; instead it reads like a story of comeone I'm already supposed to be aware of. Needs reworking to explain notability under WP:BIO. — pd_THOR | =/\= | 17:22, 11 May 2006 (UTC)
