Talk:Mark Rogowski
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ey wats up i love u man u killed that girl thats not co0l ull c me in skaeboarding som day gator gator!!!!!!!
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[edit] My major edits
Just wanted to see if anyone had some feedback on my changes. I basically totaly revised, and reworked the article, as I'm familiar with the topic, and had a lot to add. I'm not sure if I used to much opinion in there, but I tried to be as factual as possible. Any things you think I should rework to read/sound better? Hopefully someone will add more to this too!
Well as it stands now, it's extremely POV and not at all encyclopedic. Go for a dryer, more factual approach. Focus less on storytelling and reeling the reader in. The murder should be mentioned in the very first paragraph as it is inseparable from who Gator is--a skateboarder and murderer. I think what i take issue the most with tho is, you sem to be somehow aware of Gator's feelings and motives and what was going on in his head and his heart! How is this possible?? If you have some info on what Gator was thinking/feeling, cite your source.
[edit] please use proper English
that includes proper punctuation, proper grammar, and proper spelling. This is Wikipedia, not your personal diary. Kind of an embarassment to read.
D.
[edit] Brandy/Brandi
Not an authority on the subject (Used to skate and remember him, have seen the flick, but that's about it) but just noticed her name spelt both ways. I was unsure of the correct spelling so I left it alone.
[edit] downhill slide
I think gator's broken wrist / aggravated injuries should be included in the description of his downhill slide. —The preceding unsigned comment was added by Jfransella (talk • contribs) 04:17, 27 March 2007 (UTC).
