Talk:Chippendales dancers
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The article needs substantial editing: there are spelling mistakes, ambiguous pronouns ("... Banerjee enlisted ex-con Ray Colon. He wanted ..."), etc.
The article consists mostly of sentences that are short and choppy ("The man was an FBI informant."), or wordy, flowery and sentimental ("An ever devoted family man, Banerjee took his own life by hanging himself in his cell during the early morning hours ..."). In short, it reads like a popular true crime paperback.
No references are mentioned, either.
[edit] Banerjee article
I think this Banerjee person should get his own entry, for the Chippendales article is more about him than the dancers themselves.
