Talk:Chocolate Hills
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[edit] GA nomination on Hold
I believe this article will pass for GA, but there are a few things that need to be fixed first. All inline citations should directly follow the punctuation, there should be no space in between. This should be really easy to fix. There are a few statements that need inline citations as well:
*The Chocolate Hills is a the most famous tourist attraction of Bohol. - The source says "probably the most famous tourist attraction", look for a better source or remove it for now.
*Another statement says: {{cquote|The grassy hills were once coral reefs that erupted from the sea in a massive geologic shift. Wind and water put on the finishing touches over hundreds of thousands of years."}} - Add an inline citation for this one.
*Add a source for the first legend about the formation of the hills.
*In 2003, a public outcry forced a construction firm to stop quarrying at the Chocolate Hills, and was required to restore one defaced hill to its original shape. -Add source These statements need cleanup: *The molehill-shaped almost the same sized hills are an awesome sight. - Doesn't make sense, and try to avoid "complimenting" the hills. If this is part of a quote, include it in quotations.
*However, the natural vegetation on the Chocolate Hills is now highly threatened by quarrying activities. - Just fix the redirect for quarrying to quarry.
*During the dry season, the precipitation is inadequate such that the grass-covered hills dry up and turn chocolate brown. This transforms the area into seemingly endless rows of chocolate "kisses"., hence the name in reference to a branded confection. - There is some grammar errors right after kisses, and if this is going to be its own section it needs more information. If it can't be expanded include it within another section.
*For the last paragraph in the "Origin" section, only one wikilink is needed for karst topography, remove the second one.
*There are a total of 214 steps leading to the observation or view deck where one can view the sea of more than a thousand Chocolate Hills as far as the eyes can see. - Remove as far as the eyes can see, perhaps "more than a thousand Chocolate Hills are clearly visible".
*The last source for the tourism is in italics, fix the quotation to use quotation marks.
*The legislation section has several misplaced spaces and extra periods, fix those.
For these things that need to be fixed, I'll put this article on hold for seven days. If they are fixed and I don't see any other problems, I'll pass it then. If these are not fixed by then, I'll fail the article and this article will need to be renominated at a later date. Keep up the good work, and let me know on my talk page if you have any questions and I'll get back to you as soon as I can. --Nehrams2020 23:32, 7 February 2007 (UTC)
- With collaboration of the editor of the article, I will keep this on hold for 2 more days from this point, and will pass it or fail it on Friday (for my time zone). --Nehrams2020 02:41, 15 February 2007 (UTC)
More fixes:
*"Finally, investment challenges include the fact that speculators bid up property prices in the area, raising the potential cost of a proposed project; getting investors to actually put their money into the poorer parts of Bohol is complicated by communist guerrillas who extort money from local officials, i.e., having refused to pay, Mayor Torrefranca of Sagbayan, Bohol survived two assassination attempts since 1998, when the rebels firebombed his car." This statement is overally complicated and long. Split it up into two.
*"The National Committee on Geological Sciences declared the Chocolate Hills of Bohol a National Geological Monument on June 18, 1988 in recognition of its special characteristics, scientific importance, uniqueness, and high scenic value." This was crossed off but still needs a source.
*Put all inline citations directly after the punctuation with no spaces in between. Ex: "There are fifteen libraries in the city."[1] not "There are fifteen libraries in the city[1]." or "There are fifteen libraries in the city." [1]
*"As such, they are covered under the National Integrated Protected Areas System (NIPAS) with the Department of Environment and Natural Resources (DENR) as the lead implementing agency for its protection." Still has a citation needed tag, either add a source or remove it from the article.
*Reincorporate the name section into another as it is only two sentences long, perhaps the origin section. - incorporated in the subsection on Description - towards the end...
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- These must be fixed by midnight my time (I'm UTC-8) or I'll fail it. If you can't fix it by then, don't worry about it, you can easily renominate it again when the information is fixed. --Nehrams2020 00:03, 17 February 2007 (UTC)
[edit] Online resources?
Can it be renamed to a more convention title? Like "Further reading", for example? --Howard the Duck 03:47, 12 February 2007 (UTC)
- Done as per your suggestion. Apparently, this is what happened. Thanks for the suggestion above. --Ate Pinay (talk•email) 16:50, 12 February 2007 (UTC)
[edit] GA passed
According to the GA criteria, I will now pass the article. It still could use more information, so keep expanding with new sources. There are plenty of pictures which is really good for the article. Make sure the article keeps its same excellence to remain a good article. Good job, and if you have any questions please ask me on my talk page. --Nehrams2020 01:46, 17 February 2007 (UTC)
