Talk:Hamm (Westfalen) railway station

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Contents 1 GA failed 1.1 Infobox 1.2 Lead 1.3 History 1.4 The station building 1.5 Operational usage 1.6 References 1.7 External lins

[edit] GA failed

Despite the article being well-written, I had to fail it due to a lack of inline citations. I will go through the article section-by-section:

[edit] Infobox

Overall quality: Very Good

• In the lead, the station is called "Hamm (Westfalen)", but is only called "Hamm (Westf)" in the infobox. I assume that this is a simple typo and can be fixed easily.

[edit] Lead

Overall quality: Very Good, but needs citations

• Can you explain why the station has two names?
• Provide a citation stating that the station featured one of Europe's largest marshalling yards.

[edit] History

Overall quality: Good, but needs citations

• The section needs lots of citations, as there are a lot of statements of fact which need verification.
• "However, this did not provide real relief, and therefore the station area underwent major reconstruction starting in 1911 and finishing no sooner than 1929."

"No sooner" than 1929? An exact year would help here, as it sounds as if you are unsure.

• "The old station building, which was built as an island platform, was torn down and superseded by the current building, the construction of which was finished by 1920."

Was it finished in 1920 or in 1919 or before? Again, an exact year would be helpful.

• Wikilink "hump yard" to Classification yard, as I had no idea what that meant until I typed "hump yard" into the search box.
• Wikilink Paderborn to Paderborn instead of Paderborn Hauptbahnhof, as the sentence is refering to the town/city and not to the rail station, which does not yet have an article.
• "The mail station, which even had its own hump, has been completely closed due to the abolition of mail trains."

Was a law passed banning mail trains? Unless this is so, then the sentence should be reworded to reflect the "discontinuation" of mail train service. Also, if you could provide the year that mail trains were stopped, it might make a neat addition to the article.

• As a minor quibble, the section doesn't quite flow as well as I'd like it to. There are a lot of short sentences which would flow much better if they were expanded or merged into other sentences.

[edit] The station building

Overall quality: Needs work, needs citations

• The section title should be "Station building", as headings with the word "the" are not ideal as per WP:MSH.
• "It is a prime example for the historism building style" should be reworded to "It is an example of the historism building style", which will eliminate some peacock terms.
• "The building sustained damage of parts of the roof" should be "The building sustained damage to parts of the roof".
• Spelling error: "glas"
• "This, however, was regarded as typical 1980s camp as early as the mid-1990s"

Reword this to avoid using weasel words.

[edit] Operational usage

Overall quality: Needs work, needs citations

• The section in general is a little bit too "listy", in terms of prose. Some of this information might change frequently, and may thus be better served with an external link to the information.
• "Chemist" should be wikilinked, as in North America the term is not well known and is instead referred to as a "Pharmacy".

[edit] References

Overall quality: Needs work

• The size of the citation text must be smaller. To accomplish this (after inline citations have been added), insert:

which will convert the references to the proper text size.

[edit] External lins

Overall quality: Good

• Does the railway station have an official website? If so, then it should be linked to.
• The DB AG box below the links is a little bit bulky. Is there a way to consolidate it or somehow make it smaller?

Phew! That took a bit longer than I thought it would. Anyways, while I can't pass the article because of the aforementioned lack of citations, I have at least given you a few things to work on. Hope this helps, Green451 01:57, 21 December 2006 (UTC)