Talk:History of Spiritism
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[edit] Phrase for improving
I see some problems with the following phrase but I don't know exactly how to improve it:
- "This claim, and the nature of the revelation on which he based his work, caused a great deal of controversy between Spiritism and other religions."
Firstly, "...the nature of the revelation... " sounds like everyone agree that he based his work on a "revelation". Atheistic people, for once, would not believe in any such thing as a revelation. Secondly, "...caused a great deal of controversy" sounds vague and, unless we can source it, we shouldn't use it.
Please, take that constructively. I would have changed this first part myself, but I simply couldn't think of a good wording. And by requiring sources, I'm not saying I think that phrase is false. Best regards, --Abu Badali 02:42, 9 August 2006 (UTC)
- This article is work-in-progress. I have been trying to tidy up things in Category:Spirituality but unfortunately I have but little time for the huge task. This article does need A LOT of improvement and I don't even know if I am up to the it. I merely tried to set the general guidelines and the timeline. Maybe others will be able to improve it, or otherwise I will try to do it, when I have the time... Thanks for the appreciation. jggouvea 23:26, 10 August 2006 (UTC)
