Wikipedia:Peer review/Kaziranga National Park

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[edit] Kaziranga National Park

This article on an Indian national park and an UNESCO World Heritage Site was selected as Collaboration of the Month (February 2007) on WIkiProject Protected areas of India and had undergone huge expansion. Now wanting review from expert editors to take this article to the FA level or atleast GA level. However I make a request to the editors to correct the minor errors and grammar themselves. Amartyabag ^TALK2ME 05:42, 23 March 2007 (UTC)

• Comments Have not read the whole article yet. Some observations: Please consider creating a daughter article on history, and shift such details as notification numbers, or amounts of areas added to the park to the daughter article. History section needs massive summarization.

created need to summarise

Do not use citation superscripts in section headers.

Removed

Try to reduce so many levels of sections. For example, you can get rid of "Flora and fauna" section (which has got multiple levels under it) and have two separate first-level section of "Fauna" and "Flora".

Done

The section "Conservation Management" need summary form, and avoiding bold fonts. Consider creating a daughter article.--Dwaipayan (talk) 06:16, 23 March 2007 (UTC)

Rewritten and daughter article created and need to summarize

I cannot see any locator (red dot or shaded area) in the map.--Dwaipayan (talk) 06:21, 23 March 2007 (UTC)

Don't know how to resolve this problem, need help from experienced persons.

Nice observations, will work on it soon. Amartyabag ^TALK2ME 07:40, 23 March 2007 (UTC)

Tried to resolve some of the problem. Amartyabag ^TALK2ME 11:57, 24 March 2007 (UTC)

Review

• Copyedit needed
• Linking the audio to baruah.in is bad style. The link should be internal. Ambuj.Saxena could provide you with one aural rendition.
• Lead size should be doubled in size Done
• Etymology can be merged with the lead Done
• charming American --> remove charming Done
• ...firewood etc --> etc remove reword Done
• hectares --> use square km (SI) use the {{convert}} template to generate imperial equivalents. (See Climate of India) for working.). Use for all units. Done
• Unlink standalone years 1918, etc; link full dates like this August 7, 1999 Done
• chapories, nallahs? -- meaning needed as they are Indian terms.

Already clarified

• Graph needs to be svg

If there a rule in Wikipedia not to use other image formats.

• Geology
• Why are places italicised? Remove Done
• Visitor information --> rename as Tourism and rewrite as neutral tone without giving travel information to tourists. (One can access the park, Kaziranga can be accessed easily by road etc) Done Still may need editing pls review
• Administration: What is the budget? Done The actual amount was not provided event to the UNESCO, every year there is a change in the budget.Amartyabag ^TALK2ME 05:06, 26 March 2007 (UTC)
• =Conservation Management= needs to be summarised. Move content to daughter articles and write a summary of the content here. Done Summarised to about 45% of the original content.Amartyabag ^TALK2ME 04:18, 28 March 2007 (UTC)
• Kaziranga - Karbi Anglong Elephant Reserve -- why is this bold?

Remove bold

• pleasantly mild --> remove word pleasant Done
• Seasonal variation --> content in this section can be merged with climate and Flora/Fauna

This part can be added to both and to avoid redundancy created a subsection

• Golaghat District --> Golaghat district Done

Will pause review. Fix these first and let me know. =Nichalp «Talk»= 12:52, 24 March 2007 (UTC)

• A few comments:

• "Etymology of the name" → "Etymology" (see India and try to follow its example).

Merged with lead

• Try to reduce the number of one- or two-sentence paragraphs.
• Administration: Try to make the bulleted list into a paragraph since prose is preferred to lists. Same with the Biomes section. Done
• Flora: Fix the link in the list. Done
• Constraints: Delete extra spaces. Done
• Kaziranga in popular culture → In popular culture or just Popular culture Done
• Fix all Citation(s) needed tags. Done
• Further reading and viewing: Fit information into {{Cite book}} template. Done

Can U show me a article where it has been used.

• External links: KAZIRANGA NATIONAL PARK → Kaziranga National Park. Done

Happy editing, S.D. 17:24, 24 March 2007 (UTC)

Done some revision today. Amartyabag ^TALK2ME 03:00, 25 March 2007 (UTC)

Regarding {{Cite book}}, an example of its usage can be found at the "Further reading" section of Pericles. Here's an example of the first book using the template:

• Oberai, C.P.; B.S. Bonal (2002). Kaziranga: The Rhino Land. New Delhi: B.R. Publishing. 

Also, "Further reading and viewing" could be renamed to "Further information." Done

Jaws of Death → Jaws of Death. Done Cheers, S.D. 12:23, 25 March 2007 (UTC)

Replying

• SVG: See Wikipedia:Image use policy#Format. SVG is recommended. A few people can make is easily for you.
• Seasonal Variation: I don't think it's redundant. The part about climate can go in climate and the part about animals migrating can go with flora/fauna.

=Nichalp «Talk»= 14:08, 25 March 2007 (UTC)

• Images

Image:Kazi-elegrass.jpg is actually cc-by-nd (acc to original image at FlickR). So are Image:Kazi-openbill.jpg, Image:Kazi-sunbird.jpg, Image:Kazi-pallaseagle.jpg and Image:Kazi-broadleaf.jpg. All these have been tagged as cc-by-sa. So this issue need to be resolved. You can write to the photographer asking for permission to use, or, asking to release those works under cc-by-sa, or just attribution. Regards.--Dwaipayan (talk) 15:25, 25 March 2007 (UTC)

Check out this link http://www.flickr.com/photos/pankaj/325052000/ the user agrees to release the photos under the commercial use licensing. Probably this can please the Wikimedia. Also a not so clear about the release type the Flickr user send me an email which is send to the Wikimedia for further clarification.Amartyabag ^TALK2ME 12:18, 29 March 2007 (UTC)

1984

Why are so many figures dating back to a 1984 census? Are there no more recent statistics? =Nichalp «Talk»= 16:27, 26 March 2007 (UTC)

Reply

Only in case of two animals Gaur and Indian Muntjac the datas dated back to 1984 were used and in all the other cases the year 1984 figures are used for only comparision with the present figures. After the 1984 3 worst flood hit the park in 1988, 1987 and 1998, so this is a significant year. We have tried to add datas even of 2005, In India most of the survey are done at an interval of 10 years, so most of the datas were of 1999 when the last survey of many animals were done. Reference provided in all cases and the figures are taken from reliable sources like UNESCO and other government surveys. Amartyabag ^TALK2ME 04:08, 27 March 2007 (UTC)

Geology

There are no special geological features in the area of Kaziranga as there is in case of the US national parks. We have to use some facts from the geology of Assam and India which are not much influential in Kaziranga. Amartyabag ^TALK2ME 04:08, 27 March 2007 (UTC)

Need more suggestion and further review.Amartyabag ^TALK2ME 04:18, 28 March 2007 (UTC)