[edit] Peer review
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[edit] Peer review
Hey all, I brought this to GA status a few months back quite easily (there's been so much written and said about this song), but I've pretty much let it sit since then. This has the potential, with the resources available, to be a Featured Article. Since there's plenty of source material to work from, I'm mainly looking for feedback largely on how to make this a better article: everything to prose issues to punctuation to layout. Nevertheless, in-depth analysis of the article in any form at this point would be much appreciated. WesleyDodds 09:14, 2 April 2007 (UTC)
[edit] LuciferMorgan
- A lot of red links which aren't need are present.
- With the song samples, spread them to sections throughout the article (thus eradicating the unneeded section) - for example, the article has a "Live performances" section so wouldn't the live version of the song be better off in there somewhere? Wouldn't the two cover clips be better off in the "Cover versions" section also?
- There's one / two sentence paragraphs in places which makes it stubby - they perhaps could be merged and rewritten to improve flow.
- Weasly words in places - like "acclaimed", "famous", "highly popular", "notable" - adjectives are hardly ever needed in an encyclopaedia.
Overall not a bad article. LuciferMorgan 23:30, 4 April 2007 (UTC)
- Points have now been addressed and taken care of. I admit I'm having trouble finding a way to rephrase the sentence "Like the song itself, the music video for 'Smells Like Teen Spirit' has been highly popular and acclaimed." Any suggestions? WesleyDodds 11:54, 6 April 2007 (UTC)
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- Well I don't think the article proves the video was "highly popular", but proves it was acclaimed. I think the awards you list for the video prove acclaim, but not popularity. LuciferMorgan 00:16, 7 April 2007 (UTC)
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