Wikipedia:WikiProject Biography/Peer review/Wyndham Robertson
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[edit] Wyndham Robertson
Wanting to get it to GA so welcome any suggestions! --plange 03:29, 18 September 2006 (UTC)
[edit] Yannismarou
Thanks to you, Plange, I've learned all Virginian politicians of the last century (kidding!)! The article is good and well-placed for GAC. My major concern is its length. it is a bit short. But I suppose FACs are most exhaustingly examined for covering all details. GAs can be short. Minor remarks:
- "He was then elected to the Virginia House of Delegates for the 1838 session. He was then re-elected for three successive sessions, ending his service in 1841." Check a bit your prose. Here, in two centences in a row, you start with "he was then ..." This repetition is not nice.
- In "Legacy and writings" I think the first phrase "Robertson was an early donor to Emory and Henry College, the interest of which furnished the Robertson prize medal for "encouraging oratory" would be better situated at the end of the section.
- My suggestion is that at the beginning of a new paragraph don't start with "He..." but "Robertson...". --Yannismarou 17:53, 18 September 2006 (UTC)
