Wikipedia:WikiProject Military history/Peer review/Evans Carlson
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[edit] Evans Carlson
Welcoming input on this article on Evans Carlson (Carlson's Raiders). —ERcheck @ 23:53, 23 May 2006 (UTC)
[edit] Kirill Lokshin
Nice article overall; some fairly uncreative general suggestions:
- A longer lead would be good.
- The short sections in the beginning of the article might be better off merged together.
- Inline citations? ;-)
- The "Decorations" section is just a list; if there's not going to be any more text there, you might want to abandon paragraph form there and format it with bullets.
- Just adding more details on his exact role in the engagements mentioned would be worthwhile; is the information available somewhere? I would assume the award citations, if you can get them, would probably have some more names and places, at the least. Kirill Lokshin 00:51, 24 May 2006 (UTC)
- Thanks for the review and suggestions. There is a lot of information available; so, I'll work on putting the appropriate amount of detail and balance. I've added the Navy Cross citations which do add some details on his roles in Nicaragua, Makin Island, and the Long Patrol. I welcome contributions from others. —ERcheck @ 02:51, 24 May 2006 (UTC)
