Wikipedia:WikiProject Military history/Peer review/Kurt Welter
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[edit] Kurt Welter
Kurt Welter seems to be a controversial character. Some references claim that he is the highest scoring Jet Ace of World War II and other references indicate that his claims are exaggerated above and beyond what seems "normal". First, I want this article reviewed since I am relatively new to Wikipedia and want to uphold its quality standards. Secondly I want to avoid a situation where continuous reverting of the content takes place Erwin Rommel is a good example here. I also would like to know where to get a Wikipedia compliant picture from.MisterBee1966 12:35, 6 January 2007 (UTC)
[edit] Kirill Lokshin
This article still has a lot of work ahead of it. The main problems:
- It's pretty devoid of any details about Welter aside from his role as a fighter pilot; presumably the man was born somewhere, grew up, etc.
- Extensive citation is very necessary here.
- The tone seems hagiographic, in parts.
- The list of awards can be moved directly into the infobox.
As far as images go, I'm not sure. Are there any official photographs of him produced by the Luftwaffe? Kirill Lokshin 20:02, 6 January 2007 (UTC)
[edit] Yannismarou
- I see two particularly stubby sections, and in the middle a quite long one. This is not nice structure. Take a look at WP:LAYOUT. Obviously more family and personal infos are needed as Kirill pointed out.
- The prose in "World War 2" is not good. Too many stubby sentences that make the section listy and with bad flow.
- "Here Welter". I don't like "here", since you start a new paragraph. "Here" is where? And you use it again later. IMO it is not a nice form of expression, but this may well be a personal preference.
- weasel words and expressions like "It is thought that during his service with 1./NJG 10 and 10./JG 300, Welter recorded 12 victories in only 18 missions." should be properly rewritten and cited.
- "For a list of Luftwaffe jet aces see List of German World War II Jet aces". Try to find ways to link other wiki-articles within the prose of the main articles; not in notes.
- This is an example of choppy, repetitive prose:"Welter claimed 25 Mosquitos and two four-engine bombers shot down by night and two further Mosquitos by day while flying the Me 262. Welter tested a prototype Me 262 fitted with SN-2 Lichtenstein radar, however the majority of Welter’s 20+ jet victories were achieved in standard radarless Me 262 aircraft. Welter was awarded the 769."--Yannismarou 09:54, 8 January 2007 (UTC)
