Talk:Joel Marangella
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I have reworked this as the changes made to it recently had very poor grammar. IR
So your "rework" into
Chairman of the National Spiritual Assembly of France, recognized the claims of Mason Remey and was declared a Covenant-Breaker and removed from the National Spiritual Assembly of France which was immediately disolved by one of the Hands of the Cause, when the French National Assembly recognized the claims of Mason Remey as an institution.
is a grammatical improvement?????
This sentence has the grammatical style of an 8 year old, and contains spelling mistakes to boot. It is extremely hard to follow and meanders from clause to clause with little coherency. The final sentence "Mason Remy as an institution" simply is highly ambiguous - is the institution you refer to the Assembly or Mason Remey?
I have rewritten the page appropriately, I have also given it the standard Wikipedia biographical formatting (An opening sentence describing the person written about). To be fair, my previous edit excised the point about why the Assembly of France was dissolved, but I have restored that. - User:MMGB
It should be noted that "covenant breaking" is not equivalent to "excommunication". the former is the offense, the latter is the consequence. --Christian Edward Gruber
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I google searched for an image of Marangella, but couldn't find one. I remember seeing a picture of him once, but I can't remember where (or if). If anybody has a book with his picture, please scan it in. Cuñado 
- Talk 19:39, 3 April 2006 (UTC)
