Wikipedia:Version 1.0 Editorial Team/Biography articles by quality/46

• Fairly comprehensive bibliography
• Useful list of printed sources and external links
• Lacks infobox
• Very limited biographical material, for example, lacking photograph
• Discussion of importance could be expanded
• Discussion of works could be expanded

Espresso Addict 01:04, 9 January 2007 (UTC) (edit comment)

• Needs references
• Needs subheadings (Why is the lead that long? It should have its own section)
• Needs a table for Discography

Nat91 04:25, 12 October 2006 (UTC) (edit comment)

These comments refer to this article as of February 28, 2007:

I've changed the bio infobox rating from stub to "start" class. In the past couple of days numereous additions have been made to this article, taking it from a stub to about 16 paragraphs. A lot of information about his career has been added, along with a much longer list of his books. Almost all of the information has been taken from the "Knitting Club" Web page on Dickinson, meaning the sourcing is too narrow. Some suggestions for future improvements:

1. Replace the Knitting Club sourcing with more direct sourcing to Dickinson's own autobiographical writing and E.M. Forster's biography.
2. Add some mention of his romantic life, although not as much as the Knitting Club (apparently a gay history Web site). The subject is worth more notice than it's been given so far, but not as much as that site gives it. Possibly the information should be put in piecemeal, chronologically in the paragraphs about his life; alternatively in a paragraph or two in its own section.
3. His relationship with E.M. Forster (as mentor, friend, as someone Forster looked up to and was influenced by) should be added, and some mention made of it in the top section.
4. Dickinson was a man of ideas, but there are next to none in this article so far. That's the most glaring deficiency.
5. Some description of each of his books would be nice.
6. Maybe a good picture of Dickinson will become available. For copyright reasons, Wikipedia can't use Roger Fry's portrait at the British National Portrait Gallery, which looks like the best thing out there.

Noroton 17:36, 28 February 2007 (UTC)

[edit] Another suggestion

Someone familiar with Cambridge's "Tripos" should see whether or not the wording in the paragraphs about Dickinson's college years is awkward (I tried my best, but I'm not familiar with the subject). If reworded, the section should still be absolutely clear to readers who are completely unfamiliar with Tripos. I find a lot of British writing incomprehensible when this subject comes up — too often it assumes the reader knows all about it. Noroton 17:55, 28 February 2007 (UTC) (edit comment)